Comments for Punk Pen http://punkpen.com Writing in the Raw Wed, 06 Apr 2011 02:36:01 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3 Comment on Cordelia’s Lament by Lori Moritz http://punkpen.com/2011/03/cordelias-lament/comment-page-1/#comment-5679 Lori Moritz Wed, 06 Apr 2011 02:36:01 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=398#comment-5679 Yes! Just log in and go to posts. Click on Cordelia's lament and press edit. Then do whatever changes you would like, and publish! L, Lori Yes! Just log in and go to posts. Click on Cordelia’s lament and press edit. Then do whatever changes you would like, and publish!

L, Lori

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]]> Comment on Cordelia’s Lament by Adam21 http://punkpen.com/2011/03/cordelias-lament/comment-page-1/#comment-5534 Adam21 Thu, 31 Mar 2011 08:56:10 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=398#comment-5534 Is there a way you can edit posts here or do you need to delete and replace? Reason for me asking is can think of ways to expand the above but thinking of best way to go about it... Is there a way you can edit posts here or do you need to delete and replace?

Reason for me asking is can think of ways to expand the above but thinking of best way to go about it…

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]]> Comment on Cordelia’s Lament by Lori Moritz http://punkpen.com/2011/03/cordelias-lament/comment-page-1/#comment-5524 Lori Moritz Thu, 31 Mar 2011 00:06:27 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=398#comment-5524 Adam, you need to expand this... it is a cool concept. I want to know how many times she attempts to talk to her boyfriend. I want to know how many times he holds her picture and cries... I want to know if he brings any other girls into the flat, and what she thinks of that... the evolution of their separation is so rich and full of possibility and conflict. One quibble: your first line: "Cordelia moved across and silently gazed through the mirror." moved across what? It doesn't make sense that SHE moves across the mirror... but it does make sense that her image moves across the mirror, or she moves in front of the mirror... just a little distraction. L, Lori Adam, you need to expand this… it is a cool concept. I want to know how many times she attempts to talk to her boyfriend. I want to know how many times he holds her picture and cries… I want to know if he brings any other girls into the flat, and what she thinks of that… the evolution of their separation is so rich and full of possibility and conflict.

One quibble: your first line: “Cordelia moved across and silently gazed through the mirror.”

moved across what? It doesn’t make sense that SHE moves across the mirror… but it does make sense that her image moves across the mirror, or she moves in front of the mirror… just a little distraction.

L, Lori

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]]> Comment on Zombie Dreams (with a Werewolf Cameo) by 2010 Booklist | Punk Pen http://punkpen.com/2010/07/zombie-dreams-with-a-werewolf-cameo/comment-page-1/#comment-3266 2010 Booklist | Punk Pen Fri, 31 Dec 2010 21:52:27 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=205#comment-3266 [...] book gave me Nightmares. [...] [...] book gave me Nightmares. [...]

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]]> Comment on 2010 Booklist by Lori Moritz http://punkpen.com/2010/12/2010-booklist/comment-page-1/#comment-3265 Lori Moritz Fri, 31 Dec 2010 21:00:12 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=338#comment-3265 I will have to add the Terry Pratchett book to my 2011 list, which I shall post soon. Have you read American Gods by Gaiman? It was another god story, but written in a different style. Anansi boys was more humorous, while American Gods was somewhat sad in undertone. You get to meet more gods in it, too. He has a fantastic imagination. I have to get my writing gears going again. I will have to add the Terry Pratchett book to my 2011 list, which I shall post soon.

Have you read American Gods by Gaiman? It was another god story, but written in a different style. Anansi boys was more humorous, while American Gods was somewhat sad in undertone. You get to meet more gods in it, too. He has a fantastic imagination.

I have to get my writing gears going again.

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]]> Comment on 2010 Booklist by Adam21 http://punkpen.com/2010/12/2010-booklist/comment-page-1/#comment-3242 Adam21 Fri, 31 Dec 2010 00:28:25 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=338#comment-3242 Out of all those books the only one I've read is Neil Gaiman's Anansi Boys...believe I liked it but it was quite a long time ago so shall have to re-read sometime. If you like dark Children's adventure stories I can recommend Terry Pratchett's The Amazing Maurice and his Educated Rodents... Out of all those books the only one I’ve read is Neil Gaiman’s Anansi Boys…believe I liked it but it was quite a long time ago so shall have to re-read sometime.

If you like dark Children’s adventure stories I can recommend Terry Pratchett’s The Amazing Maurice and his Educated Rodents…

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]]> Comment on Christmas Requiem by Lori Moritz http://punkpen.com/2010/12/christmas-requiem/comment-page-1/#comment-3194 Lori Moritz Wed, 29 Dec 2010 07:27:22 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=322#comment-3194 I think we need to re-establish our skype tradition. I am logged in a lot. That said: a thing that stood out as GREAT: "he looked at her with the eyes of his memories" - great concept I'm getting the feeling that Mary is responding to her disappointment in Seamus with a "if you can't beat 'm, join 'm" attitude. Will Mary become the token drunk? The requiem is very sad.... :'( Obviously, it is not over... part 2? I think we need to re-establish our skype tradition. I am logged in a lot.

That said:

a thing that stood out as GREAT:
“he looked at her with the eyes of his memories” – great concept

I’m getting the feeling that Mary is responding to her disappointment in Seamus with a “if you can’t beat ‘m, join ‘m” attitude.

Will Mary become the token drunk?

The requiem is very sad…. :’(

Obviously, it is not over… part 2?

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]]> Comment on Writing Contest Update by Lori Moritz http://punkpen.com/2010/11/writing-contest-update/comment-page-1/#comment-2556 Lori Moritz Tue, 30 Nov 2010 18:45:41 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=307#comment-2556 These are some great ideas. I am waiting for the artwork to be finished before I can post a winner to the last contest. Then I will mix something up for the next one ;) These are some great ideas.

I am waiting for the artwork to be finished before I can post a winner to the last contest.

Then I will mix something up for the next one ;)

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]]> Comment on The First Time by Lori Moritz http://punkpen.com/2010/11/the-first-time/comment-page-1/#comment-2555 Lori Moritz Tue, 30 Nov 2010 18:44:18 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=292#comment-2555 I will put some comments up on it later today ;) I will put some comments up on it later today ;)

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]]> Comment on The First Time by Adam21 http://punkpen.com/2010/11/the-first-time/comment-page-1/#comment-2435 Adam21 Fri, 26 Nov 2010 08:58:55 +0000 http://punkpen.com/?p=292#comment-2435 Well like already mentioned, wrote this as standalone story....but perhaps not. Thoughts on "The Crypt?" Well like already mentioned, wrote this as standalone story….but perhaps not.

Thoughts on “The Crypt?”

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